Talk:California/@comment-5514152-20120915231407

Alrighty, so I'll tell you what you should change about this California.

First off, why is she America's younger sister? Since she practically is apart of him, wouldn't one think that she would be his daughter instead?

Secondly, wearing the same jacket as him is kind of uncreative. Sure, it's a different color, but most Californians don't dress like that... Trust me, I live there.

The date of independence really shouldn't be the fourth of July, considering that that was going on on the east coast of America. California had nothing to do with that. You could use the date that the Califonia Republic declared its independence from Mexico, though: June 14, 1846. You could even use the date California was admitted to the Union: September 9, 1850.

In her personality description, you should have included a bit more of her interests, such as film-making (Hollywood), surfing (stereotypical Californian pastime), etc.

Elena seems a bit white-washed also. She wouldn't have such pale skin and natural blonde hair. She has a big history with Mexico, and a lot of the population is Hispanic. She would really have darker hair, skin, and eyes. She also has no need for an ahoge, and it's kind of annoying that all Hetalia USA OCs have them for no reason.

I don't like how there's literally no history here. All you need to do is research.Hereis a good place to start. Have fun, and good luck! :)